I found reading the story to be enticing. I was constantly wondering which way this unique narrative was taking me. I found it a little uneasy to read when the ink blots where placed on the page, it made the faint black words harder to see. I am curious to see who or what the response to these statements and questions would be. Would a librarian believe books to die of old age? What about a techno-librarian? I am confused by the last lonely period on the last page…the symbolization is lost to me in my lack of ink.
Kristen, I loved how you extended your metaphors in places, like the silverfish into nickels. I also loved the pictures you put in—they were so bright and vivid. The changing of fonts was really clever. I didn’t catch that for a few pages, but once I did, it kept my attention—trying to read into reasons for font changes. But I was wondering about a few things as I thought of pass three and four:
The white space is bugging me. It’s not so much because it’s there, but because you’ve filled your story with so many wonderful pictures that when I see it, I’m wondering if I have a computer glitch, or if the file was corrupted somehow. This is just me (and having read my pass two, you’ve seen that I love to go all out on images), but you might want to put something in there, even if it’s just a washed out silhouette. I found that my eyes kept moving away from your text and to those voids.
Reader control—this is a pure “me” issue. I wasn’t crazy about losing control of my ability to move through the piece—at least when I downloaded it. It had this linear, one-way approach. Since the story is about books, you might want to see if you can find a way to let us “flip” through the pages, like a real book.
I found reading the story to be enticing. I was constantly wondering which way this unique narrative was taking me. I found it a little uneasy to read when the ink blots where placed on the page, it made the faint black words harder to see. I am curious to see who or what the response to these statements and questions would be. Would a librarian believe books to die of old age? What about a techno-librarian? I am confused by the last lonely period on the last page…the symbolization is lost to me in my lack of ink.
Kristen, I loved how you extended your metaphors in places, like the silverfish into nickels. I also loved the pictures you put in—they were so bright and vivid. The changing of fonts was really clever. I didn’t catch that for a few pages, but once I did, it kept my attention—trying to read into reasons for font changes. But I was wondering about a few things as I thought of pass three and four:
The white space is bugging me. It’s not so much because it’s there, but because you’ve filled your story with so many wonderful pictures that when I see it, I’m wondering if I have a computer glitch, or if the file was corrupted somehow. This is just me (and having read my pass two, you’ve seen that I love to go all out on images), but you might want to put something in there, even if it’s just a washed out silhouette. I found that my eyes kept moving away from your text and to those voids.
Reader control—this is a pure “me” issue. I wasn’t crazy about losing control of my ability to move through the piece—at least when I downloaded it. It had this linear, one-way approach. Since the story is about books, you might want to see if you can find a way to let us “flip” through the pages, like a real book.